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„Join in death“ of Jasmin Räbsamen
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Dear Jasmin,
I like your poem partly but not wholly. I think the seed of hope is too weakly expressed. There should be some more light to this poem to make it more clear to the reader. It's nice that you wrote the comment, so people get a better understanding of it. I like the language of the poem much. I find it just a bit hard to say that there's nothing beside pain between birth and death. It's such a harsh view on life. Surely there are happy and shiny moments in every life.
Best regards,
Claudio
I like your poem partly but not wholly. I think the seed of hope is too weakly expressed. There should be some more light to this poem to make it more clear to the reader. It's nice that you wrote the comment, so people get a better understanding of it. I like the language of the poem much. I find it just a bit hard to say that there's nothing beside pain between birth and death. It's such a harsh view on life. Surely there are happy and shiny moments in every life.
Best regards,
Claudio
Answer by Jasmin Räbsamen (15.12.2007):
Thanks for your comment.
Yes, you are right, there are light moments.
But the one who I wrote to and I have a kind of history together which contains the exchange of rather dark and sad poems. So it fits, I think.
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